麻烦各位帮忙检查一下这篇文章的语法错误,Since the population is rising dramatically these days,many people start to believe that we have to exploit more land to satisfy various kinds of needs from our people,even when the exploitati

麻烦各位帮忙检查一下这篇文章的语法错误,Since the population is rising dramatically these days,many people start to believe that we have to exploit more land to satisfy various kinds of needs from our people,even when the exploitati
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Since the population is rising dramatically these days,many people start to believe that we have to exploit more land to satisfy various kinds of needs from our people,even when the exploitation may be at the expense of animals,especially endangered animals.However,I strongly disagree with this point of view for mainly two reasons that I will outline below.
First of all,it is really cruel for us to deprive animals of their homeland just because we may need to use it.I always believe that all the lives in the nature are equal,if we make other species extinct merely for our own sake,we are bound to regret for what we have done someday.For example,due to the serious destruction of bamboo forest,the panda which we regard as the national treasure of China is increasingly dying out.What’s more,in order to prevent pandas from extinction we have to make a great effort,such as rebuild the bamboo forest and breed pandas artificially,and these kinds of works cost a great deal of both time and fortune.Given the great cost of protecting endangered animals,why should we persecute them at first?
Secondly,we could supply the demand of land by means of increasing the efficiency of land use and family planning.In fact,we could relieve the pressure of land deficient simply by constructing buildings densely.For example,there are more than seven million people living in Hong Kong,thanks to the density of its buildings such a small place is able to accommodate so many people.Another effective method of satisfying land use requirement is family plan.As a matter of fact,a country can use the policy of family plan both to control the rate of population growth and to lighten the financial burden of a single family.Since we could meet our needs of land by applying these two means,there certainly will be enough space for animals to live in on the earth.
In conclusion,I strongly suggest that we should protect the endangered animals and find other ways to satisfy our needs.Anyway,the lovely animals can only be seen in books in the future is certainly the last thing we want to see.

麻烦各位帮忙检查一下这篇文章的语法错误,Since the population is rising dramatically these days,many people start to believe that we have to exploit more land to satisfy various kinds of needs from our people,even when the exploitati
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